The passive voice is a great way to
hide critical information:
- This sentence was written yesterday. (But I have no idea who wrote it.)
The message can be even more abbreviated and obtuse:
- This sentence was written. (But by whom, when, and ....?
Even if we include the missing information, the emphasis is deflected from the issue of who wrote the sentence because the
subject of the sentence (the focus of attention) is
not "who the author is". The author (the doer) is almost parenthetical information.
- This sentence was written yesterday by one of my technical people.
- This sentence was written yesterday (by one of my technical people).
No wonder that people like to use the passive voice when writing reports; they can completely avoid identifying who is responsible for a situation!
- The failure in the bridge supports was due to the fact that the bridge had not been regularly inspected.
But the reader probably wants to know who caused the problem:
- The failure...had not been regularly maintained by J.B. Cochrane. (still passive voice)
preferably stated this way:
- J.B Cochrane did not regularly inspect the bridge supports, so they failed.
The passive voice also sounds more formal, because it implies objectivity. (Nobody is involved.) This is why the passive voice is almost always used for experiments, studies, and technical information. It sounds so perfectly scientific to say:
- The solution should be kept stirred while the dry ingredients are added.
instead of:
- You should continue to stir the solution while you add the dry ingredients.
Compare our original sentence, now written in the
active voice:
- One of my technical people wrote this sentence yesterday.
with its passive voice version:
- This sentence was written yesterday.
Does it sound more sincere?
Using the active voice usually produces a sense that the message is direct (to-the-point), people are an important part of the "equation", the action is more dynamic, there is more immediacy (happening now), and in general, that the message is more sincere. (The active voice also tends to produce a more
forceful tone, but that is a topic for another time.)
A bonus of using the active voice is (most often) a more concise sentence, because it eliminates some use of the verb "be" and often a preposition.
- The message should be listened to by everyone.
(passive - 8 words) - Everyone should listen to the message.
(active - 6 words)
You are probably thinking that I don't like the passive voice at all.
For business communication, the active voice is usually the better choice, and should dominate. After all, business communication is mostly about
people doing things with each other, building
trust, and being
efficient.
Passive voice can be used to
add variety, and is
sometimes more appropriate to the communication task. (Who is the reader; what is the purpose?)
But it's easy to be mislead about which voice to use. For example, of the following two choices, the passive version
seems to be the best. Who cares about any
person being mentioned in
this situation?
- You should put tab A in slot B. (active)
- Tab A should be put in slot B. (passive)
Surprise! There is yet a better choice, and once again it is active:
- Tab A fits into slot B. (Thanks to Deena Madnick for this version.)
I'll repeat: the writer has to consider the reader and the purpose of the message, and either personalize (typically) or depersonalize and formalize (infrequently) as required.